Chorus of the Sands Patch Notes: Prologue through Chapter 2

Prologue:

Starting word count - 1886

Added several commas to spit-up run-on sentences

Fixed 2 instances improper comma use and replaced with semi-colons

Fixed 1 instance of improper comma use and replaced it with a colon

Fixed several instances of improper use of the term "Arvel"

Fixed awkward conversation flow by reworking dialogue between characters

Removed instances of unneeded commas

Removed several unneeded words, improving reading flow

Removed/reworked instances of the word "wooden" appearing too frequently in a short span of time

Removed instances of redundant sentences that say nothing

Removed instances of unnecessary world-building/details that didn't contribute to the story

Rephrased multiple lines of dialogue to improve flow

Final word count - 1806

Chapter 1:

Starting word count - 1639

Added mention of noble houses "Eder", "Noxen", "Kenik", and "Asara"

Added several commas to spit-up run-on sentences

Fixed 3 instance of improper comma use and replaced it with a semi-colon

Removed several instances of the term "Brother" where it was not needed

Removed several unneeded words, improving reading flow

Removed unneeded commas

Final word count - 1613

Chapter 2:

Starting word count - 2733

Added a missing closing quote to [REDACTED]'s dialogue

Added several commas to spit-up run-on sentences

Removed several unneeded words in the opening scene to improve flow and reduce redundancy

Removed redundant dialogue

Removed redundant narration

Reworked [REDACTED]'s dialogue so they weren't undermining their own argument

Fixed many instances of improper comma use and replaced it with a semi-colon

Fixed an instance of "his" incorrectly spelling "this"

Fixed an instance of "somedays" being one word and split it into two: "some days"

Fixed an instance of "insect like" not having a dash. Corrected to "insect-like"

Final word count - 2644