Chorus of the Sands Patch Notes: Chapters 6 through 11

Chapter 6:

Starting word count - 2496

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Reworked several lines of dialogue to feel more natural and less "wordy"

Removed instances of unneeded commas

Removed several unneeded words, improving flow

Removed instances of unnecessary world-building/details

Final word count - 2415

Chapter 7:

Starting word count - 2639

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Fixed 2 instances of "worst case", changing them to "worst-case"

Reworked several sentence structure to encourage better flow

Reworked several lines of dialogue to make them feel more natural and less stilted

Removed several unneeded words, improving reading flow

Removed unneeded commas

Final word count - 2440

Chapter 8:

Starting word count - 2781

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Fixed an instance of "hyperawareness" and corrected it to "hyper-awareness"

Reworked several lines of dialogue to feel more life-like

Removed redundant dialogue

Removed redundant narration

Final word count - 2684 Chapter 9:

Starting word count - 4670

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Changed the position of the original chapters 9 and 10 for better chapter flow. The old chapter 10 is the new chapter 9 and vice versa

Reworked several sentences for better flow

Removed redundant dialogue

Removed redundant narration

Changed on instance of 1st person narration and changed it back to 3rd person

Fixed 2 instances of improper dialogue placement which gave the indication the wrong person was speaking

Fixed an instance of "musk" spelled as "must"

Fixed 2 instances of "who's" spelled as "whose"

Fixed an instance of "others" spelled as "othera"

Fixed an instance of a character's name being spelled incorrectly

Removed an instance of the word "people" to improve reading flow, as it appeared too many times in quick succession

Final Word Count - 4531

Chapter 10

Starting word count - 3245

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Changed the position of the original chapters 9 and 10 for better chapter flow. The old chapter 10 is the new chapter 9 and vice versa

Reworked several sentences for better flow

Removed redundant dialogue

Removed redundant narration

Fixed an instance of "anyone" being spelled as "any"

Fixed an instance of "fade" being spelled as "face"

Reworked a sentence, changing the word "worry" to "fear" for better flow and less repetition of the former

Final word count - 3173

Chapter 11

Starting word count - 4065

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Fixed an instance of the word "to" appearing where it shouldn't, ruining the sentence it was in

Fixed an instance of "floor" being spelled as "flood"

Fixed instances of [REDACTED]'s dialogue as they were starting to sound overly British compared to previous books

Reworked one paragraph to make sense. Previous iteration was unclear who the subject was and the list involved was punctuated poorly

Reworked a paragraph mentioning a "door" as a goal. The door never existed nor was every mentioned or a goal. New iteration lines up with scene's intended purpose

Reworked several sentences for better flow

Removed redundant dialogue

Removed redundant narration

Final word count - 3872