Chorus of the Sands Edit/Patch Notes: Chapter 12 through 20

Chapter 12

Starting word count - 2304

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Fixed improper spelling of a character's name

Reworked several lines of dialogue to sound less pretentious

Reworked several sentences for better flow

Removed redundant dialogue

Removed redundant narration

Final word count - 2252

Interlude 1

Starting Word Count - 377

Finished the first interlude, Valen scripture, inspired heavily from the New Testament.

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Removed several commas to prevent prevalent comma splicing

Final Word Count - 510

Chapter 13

Starting Word Count - 4367

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Fixed improper spelling of a location's name

Removed several commas to prevent prevalent comma splicing

Removed an instance on internal dialogue

Removed first instances of an early plot idea that never came to fruition, and the following paragraph that fleshed it out

Removed another instance of implications regarding the Valen's enemy and accompanying 2 paragraphs after it

Removed unnecessary description of a characters appearance

Removed several instances of words being repeated within a short span of time from each other

Reworked several points of a character's pondering to make it more believable

Final word count - 3950

Chapter 14

Starting Word Count - 2854

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Removed several commas to prevent prevalent comma splicing

Removed instances of words being repeated within a short span of time

Reworked several lines of dialogue to feel more natural and have more flow

Final word count - 2794

Chapter 15

Starting Word Count - 2425

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Removed several commas to prevent prevalent comma splicing

Removed instances of words being repeated within a short span of time

Reworked several lines of dialogue to feel more natural and have more flow

Final word count - 2316

Chapter 16

Starting Word Count - 3661

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Added extensive dialogue to one scene, between 3 characters, to further a small plot thread

Added a missing period

Removed several commas to prevent prevalent comma splicing

Removed several redundant words that served no purpose

Corrected a typo for the word "forward"

Corrected a typo for the word "bridge"

Corrected a typo for the word "separated"

Corrected a typo for the word "one"

Corrected a plot hole that would have had small implications later in the novel

Combined 2 separate paragraphs into one for improved flow

Final word count - 3742

Chapter 17

Starting word count - 3694

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Removed several commas to prevent prevalent comma splicing

Removed several redundant words that served no purpose

Removed a sentence that hinted at complications that never came to fruition

Fixed lack of capitalization for one instance of the title "High Priest"

Fixed an instance of the wrong word being used in place of the word "head"

Fixed an instance of "Moreen" being spelled as "Maureen"

Fixed an instance of a question not having a question mark

Fixed and instance of "forward" being "forth"

Final word count - 3469

Chapter 18

Starting word count - 3188

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Removed italics in a piece of dialogue. They made a character seem too much like a Karen.

Removed several commas to prevent prevalent comma splicing

Removed several redundant words that served no purpose

Reworked first sentence to make more sense

Removed a piece of internal dialogue. It felt awkward and out of place

Reworked a character's dialogue to be more reflective of the character. What I had was too generic

Reworked a sentence to use the word "notorious" instead of "nefarious". The former makes more sense.

Fixed a typo "them" to "to"

Fixed a typo "Highold" to "Highfold"

Fixed a typo "hear" to "here"

Fixed a typo "Childrens" to "Children's"

Fixed a typo "woman" to "women"

Fixed a typo "theif" to "thief"

Final word count - 2904

Chapter 19

Starting word count - 3899

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Removed several commas to prevent prevalent comma splicing

Removed several redundant words that served no purpose

Reworked some character dialogue to ramble less. The rambling served no purpose

Reworked several lines of narration to be more fluid and coherent, better reflecting topic(s) of conversation

Fixed a typo: "tunich" to "tunic"

Fixed 2 typos: "touch" to "tough"

Fixed a typo: "ground" to "grounds"

Fixed a typo: "Valen's" to "Valens"

Final word count - 3744

Chapter 20

Starting word count - 2307

Added several commas to split-up run-on sentences

Removed several commas to prevent prevalent comma splicing

Removed several redundant words that served no purpose

Fixed a typo: "3" to "three"

Final word count - 2199